I'm going to start posting samples of my writing here as well as my thoughts. Not all of it, mind you, just sections. Here's the first one. About four thousand words.
She ran like someone with nowhere to run. A sort of frantic, panting marathon deeper into the rain-drenched night, knowing all the while that it must be, has to be, a useless endeavor. Mist rose from the streets, obscuring the future and shrouding the past, leaving only the constant, panicked running. As she skipped around a corner, her peripheral vision caught sight of the truck just a tad too late, and it was almost a relief when it slammed into her shoulder, spun her around, dropped her to the ground like a sack of flour. The truck never even stopped, never saw the look on her face as it thundered down the street.
The woman stared into a nearby puddle as if seeing herself for the first time, and what she saw rang a chord within. Hollow cheeked, skin yellow from lack of proper foods, hair dull and lifeless, she looked how she felt. A trickle of blood waltzed slowly in a fascinating, dizzying dance down her chin from where she had hit her head on the edge of the manhole cover. The manhole cover…the open manhole cover. Gasping, she tried desperately to get to her feet as a warbling, haunting cry rose from the darkness next to her. Failing in even this small battle, her eyes widened in terror as she pulled herself to the light pole on the corner of the street, then used it to stagger to her feet.
She stumbled forward, and then her shoulders slumped, sagging in defeat. Turning, she stared at a door in front of her as a wailing, moaning sound could be heard creeping up on her from behind hunting her, sniffer her, finding her-her hand rapped softly on the door of it's own accord. She stared down at it, as if shocked that it could betray her like that, as the curtains shifted and an old man's voice could be heard mumbling about those dang kids again. Too tired to run, she slumped against the door, then fell in as it opened, spilling light onto the street and banishing the shadows. The wailing stopped, the moaning silent except for one small, soft moan of despair, as she looked at the old man in front of her with sorrow in her eyes.
Darren knew something was wrong with the little thing before him. 'Course he knew, he wasn't blind or deaf, like everybody seemed to think he was these days. Moving carefully so as not to trip and fall over her blurred form (it wouldn't do to break his other hip), he dragged her inside, then stood at the door, peering desperately into the night, straining for some hint of what it was that had the young lady moaning softly to herself. He thought, for a moment, that he saw a flash of gray, like night against night, but put it down to those dang eyes of his. Turning, he saw his wife, Ethel, lifting the girl under the arms onto their couch. "Darren, you old coot, get over here and help me get her up, hear?" The paisley colored couch sagged gently under her weight as she shifted into position on the couch, her black, bedraggled hair spread out around her head in a sickly looking halo.
Darren went to bed, feeling helpless before the matronly onslaught that was Ethel with a purpose. As he lay back, he kept imagining he could hear…something. Sort of like a hungry cat, prowling around his window in the night. It seemed, though, that the more he strained the less he could hear it. Finally, he became frustrated enough to get up and put in his hearing aids, but as soon as he put them in he heard a crackling, ragged noise, like electricity being ripped in half, and he threw them down in frustration. He heard nothing else that night, but he lay awake for a long time, thinking about himself and his life.
Morning came. Sunrise kissed the streets, making everything better, and the girl, for now that he saw her in the morning light she couldn't have been a day over seventeen, the girl was up and bandaged, stuffing buckwheat pancakes into her mouth and looking guilty as sin. Smiling gently, Darren sat next to her, then said in the too-loud voice of the hearing impaired, "Hullo, girl."
A slight pause, then, "Hello."
They ate in silence after that, staring at each other warily. After a bit of visual chicken, Ethel came in with another batch of pancakes, smiling like she'd found a starving kitten in the street. Bustling about the small breakfast nook merrily, she kept up a constant stream of chatter that served to cover everything as Darren stared at the girl in benevolent bafflement. Finally, he leaned over and whispered loudly, "Psst! I'll give you some syrup if you tell me what happened out there!" The girl stared at him for a long time, then burst out laughing, all at once, as if not sure what to do with herself. Darren relaxed, happy he'd done something right. The rest of the day was a whirlwind of confusion for Darren, as he wasn't used to much more than getting up late, reading the paper, then ambling on down to Ben's to see if he was up for coffee and chess. They took the girl to the hospital, where she continued to be her taciturn self. The doctor was a large man who seemed almost resentfully jolly, like an annoyed Santa Claus. Darren and the girl resumed staring at each other while saying nothing while Ethel and the doctor chattered like a couple of blue jays in human form. Darren listened to their conversation while keeping a curious eye on the girl.
"She doesn't appear to have any I.D., Mrs. Gustaffson."
"What? I.D.? What's she need I.D. for?"
"Why, so I can know who she is."
"Look, young man, don't be playing games with an old lady. I'm sure SHE knows who she is, why don't you just ask her?"
"Mrs. Gustaffson, I-"
"Ethel."
"Ethel, it's not enough that she knows who she is, she has to be able to prove it."
"Why's that, huh?"
"Well, the government-"
Darren, sensing an issue he really knew something about, pounced like a dog on a large, juicy steak.
"Another mint! Hah! What's a young thing like her need another mint for? Why, I tell you, if I was fifty years younger…"
The doctor, used to old interrupting men, deftly swung the conversation back around.
"You'd show me what a young person could do. Anyway, Ethel, she does seem to be in good condition. She'll need to stay off that leg for a couple of weeks, and she seems to be severely malnourished, but I give her two months or so and she'll be right as rain."
The doctor mentally slapped himself for using such a hideous cliché. Darren, meanwhile, had gotten severely bored with all the muttering everyone was doing, and had wandered over to stare at the girl-shaped blur on the hospital bed. Darren casted around in his thoughts warily, searching for a suitable topic of conversation when conversing with young blurs.
"So…how 'bout them raiders?"
The girl just stared at him. Getting bored again, Darren started up to wander aimlessly down the hall (he was good at wandering aimlessly), when a soft voice cut through the shroud of silence surrounding his world.
"My name's Mary."
Darren rubbed his ears, sure he must have imagined her voice. Clear as a bell. He hadn't heard anything that clear in years. He looked over at Ethel-blur, but all he could hear was all that Another Mint talk again.
"Scuse me, girl?"
The dam burst.
"My name's MaryIdon'tknowwhat'sgoingonandI'mscaredand-"
"Whoh, hold up there chickadee. Tell you what, you just rest now and we'll get you back to my place. We don't exactly have a guest room, but I'm sure m' son can put you up for a while."
A brief look of pain flitted across Darren's face.
"He's got plenty of room, after all."
Charlie was tired. Bone tired, dead tired, the kind of tired that reaches down into your soul and plants roots. He wandered around in a fugue, stumbling from room to room as a dead man walking, and only a little more alive. The bare walls yelled at him, screaming their loneliness and guilt. He stumbled into his bathroom, and caught a look at himself in the mirror. Three day's stubble creeped across his face like an invading army, and a foul, rank odor corroded the air around him. S' the smell of despair, he thought to himself. No, wait, it's the smell of me not showering for three days. The bottle in his hand crashed to the floor unheeded as he peered closer into the mirror, searching for some sign of the man he had been. He couldn't find anything, but oddly enough it was more comforting than sad. Figuring it was about time he went shopping (vodka can only keep you going for so long before diarrhea sets in, as he found out to his dismay), he stumbled out the door and into his car, where he had left his keys in the lock. All of a sudden, a thought struck him with perfect clarity. S' no good, driving whatsit. Drunk, thas' it. S' no good, driving drunk. Should walk drunk instead. With that sage wisdom running through his head, Charlie left the keys in the car and proceeded to zig zap back and forth across the street, wincing as he ran into a telephone pole. He made his way down to the grocery store, then stood there for a while, trying to remember why he was there. A sudden screaming filled his ears, as from a distance away, and he turned curiously to see a man pointing a shoddy-looking gun at a cashier. Ice ran through his veins, sobering him up quicker than three jugs of water and a horrible night's sleep. He reached for his gun, then realized that he didn't own one anymore. As he watched, the situation crawled along painfully slow, and he had a horrid sense that he knew, he just knew that he wasn't going to do anything. Time sped up, and the man stuffed a grocery bag full of cash. A big man walked out of the bathroom behind the gunman, apparently unaware of what had been happening in his absence. The gunman, backing away slowly from the cashier, ran straight into the man and then shot the gun twice. The woman went down in a splash of blood as the store erupted in screaming and Charlie woke up.
What a horrible dream, Charlie thought to himself. It then occurred to him to wonder why he was laying in a clean white bed. Last he could remember, he was walking to get groceries. He tried to get up, then collapsed back in weakness, realizing suddenly that it all had been real, but that he hadn't done nothing. A gloved hand touched his arm, and he looked up into the face of annoyance.
"That was really stupid."
"Yeah, I know."
The nurse glanced down at her clipboard.
"So, after running forward and screaming bloody hell, you tripped on a bench and fell on the gunman, who then proceeded to beat the ever loving tar out of you with his gun. You went unconscious, after which he crawled out from under you (trodding on your face in the meantime) and ran off with the money. I'm sure you'll be glad to hear that the cashier is fine, and the worst injury you've sustained is a couple of severely bruised ribs and a broken nose."
Charlie nodded, looking properly embarrassed.
"The broken nose was from him trodding upon your face, Mr. Gustaffson."
Charlie nodded, unsure what she was getting at.
"Your face. He stepped on your face."
A slight snigger escaped from the nurse, but she looked properly shocked and fled out of the room before bursting into gales of laughter. Charlie sat back, contemplating a world where nurses sniggered at people who'd had other people viciously step on their faces.
The nurse walked back in, then said in a severe voice,
"Also, you smell like vodka and grossness. I'm not giving you a sponge bath, but I strongly suggest you take a shower first thing when you get home. Also, you can leave this afternoon, assuming you're feeling better."
NEXT SECTION: I'm not too big a fan of this part. I'll probably redo it or cut it entirely. 523 words.
Charlie had a dream that night. He was standing under an overhead sprinkler at work, and it was speaking to him. He couldn't understand what it was saying, but he knew that it was important. Something about his wife and kids. Also, he needed to buy celery. He woke up in a cold sweat, wondering why exactly the dream had been so terrifying. "Well, I did forget to buy celery," He thought. After that, he couldn't sleep (for fear of recurring celery dreams), and so he went out onto his back porch and lit up a cigarette. As the burning tip glowed in the frosty morning air, he couldn't help but wonder where it had all gone wrong. He remembered the birthday party…
"Look, Charlie, it's not that big of a deal, really. You can go to work, she's just going to have some friends over, and we might go to the zoo."
"Marta, I will NOT surrender my principles to those self-serving egomaniacs at JW's! I should think you would be supporting me in this, as well!"
There was a long pause, while Marta glared at the kids, who were tearing up the living room. Charlie just knew that she wasn't saying something, and she wasn't doing it very loudly, as well. Frustrated, he stomped into the kitchen, realizing that he'd forgotten to get Celery on the way home, which only made things worse. She just doesn't get it. I can't not go to my own daughter's birthday party! What kind of a dad would I be? Marta came in and read his mind, which always seemed so easy for her.
"Charlie, it's not like that. Everything's a big deal with you. When the goldfish dies, sometimes it's just a goldfish. You don't always have to have a funeral. And no, I'm not some sort of sick, twisted person."
"I just don't understand how you can be so cavalier about everything! What are you going to do when Mary's birthday comes tomorrow and I'm not there? She'll be wondering where Daddy is, and what will you say? Daddy had to go to work. Ugh, even saying it sounds despicable."
Mary tore through the room like a miniature tornado, then stopped in front of Charlie with an incredible stillness, looked up, and said, "Guess what, Daddy? I'm going to the zoo for my birthday! Gerty's gonna come over an Helen an Jackie an Steve (even though he's a boy) an Sara an…" Her voice trailed off into a long chorus of names, most of which Charlie had never met, much less knew about. He looked helplessly at Marta for a minute, imploring her to understand, but she merely rolled her eyes and walked out of the room. Later that night, Charlie went up to his room while thinking heavy thoughts. He slipped into his bedroom, sat in his old, stuffed armchair, and stared at Marta thoughtfully. "Amazing…", he thought to himself. "How is it possible to care about one woman that much, for one woman to be that beautiful?" He shook his head, staring in slightly melancholy wonder, and then went to bed.
NEXT SECTION: Segment about Charlie's son, Danny. About 1400 words.
Danny spat in the dust, and then immediately felt guilty for doing so. After berating himself for feeling guilty, he got painfully to his feet (sticking his hand in the congealed glob of dust and spit while he was at it), and turned around, looking meekly at the ground. A rough hand grabbed his face, and he heaved a tired sigh inside, though he was careful to not let it show on his face.
"So, Dansy-Pansy, think you can mess up my yard like that, hmm? Maybe I should give you another taste of fist, teach you some manners?"
Hating himself as he did it, Danny said, "So-sorry, Chaz. It's your dust, and I shouldn't have spit on it. I'm really sorry."
Chaz laughed aloud. "Hahaha! Pathetic! What a loser. Let's go, guys."
Danny watched as Chaz the Monster walked off. "One of these days I'll call him that to his face," Danny thought. A hand touched his back.
"Hello, Lise."
"Hey, Danny. You ok?"
"Yeah, sure, never better. You know, I think I've actually grown to like a little dust first thing in the morning. Really starts your day off right, you know?"
"Danny, you should-"
"What, Lise? What should I do, hmm? Punch him? Is that what I should do? I think we all know how that'd go."
Danny turned around furiously to berate his friend some more, than stopped in shock as he saw Lise. Her long brown hair was curled around her head in a wild halo, mixed with grass and little pieces of cheese. Blood trickled out of the corner of her mouth, and a large scrape was just starting ooze on her right arm. She turned away, as if to hide what had happened, and then turned back defiantly.
"So I guess you're not the only one with problems, Danny."
With that she hurried off, leaving Danny to gape like a fish for the next ten seconds. A mocking laugh echoed across the courtyard, a parting shot from Chaz.
Danny splashed water over his face in the bathroom, then stared in the mirror and tried to pinpoint exactly what was wrong. All he saw was the same Danny he saw everyday. Dark brown hair fell across his forehead, and green eyes peeked out at the world from eye sockets a bit too cavernous for his comfort. He had a long, aquiline nose and low set cheekbones, giving his face an angular appearance. It was almost like he'd been put together by a mathematician instead of an artist. Drab clothes draped his tall, lanky frame, making him look like a scarecrow with a weight problem. His mother always said he just needed to fill out, but with his luck he'd just get fat and bony instead of skinny and bony. Danny snapped out of his reverie as he heard the bathroom door open, and hurriedly slipped past the two boys coming in.
Danny moved like a ghost down the hallway, never quite touching or making eye contact with anyone. Homeroom was awkward, to say the least. He sat next to Lise, and he couldn't help avoiding looking at her face even more than usual. First of all, he would never admit it to anyone, but he thought she was pretty, and whenever he thought that he couldn't look at her. Her injuries that day only exacerbated the problem, as it was a little disconcerting to see someone else on the wrong end of a punch, and he didn't quite know how to ask about it. He and Lise had been neighbors for most of his life, and while he knew her, he still found it difficult to talk to her at times. This generally happened when he most wanted to talk to her, in fact.
Danny dreaded lunch. It was always so awkward. He and Lise always sat together, but they never sat in the same place twice. She was one of those girls that could sit anywhere and be perfectly comfortable, above all the cliques, and she dragged Danny along like some sort of human kite wherever she went. Today, however, they sat by themselves at one end of a table and talked about everything except anything important, studiously avoiding any subject that involved words like "fist" and "face". Danny was about to broach the subject of kangaroos and how they were considered pests in Australia (he couldn't think of anything else), when a dreadful event occurred. Someone slid down the bench to sit next to Lise, which was ten times worse than just sitting down. It smacked of familiarity that bothered Danny in a way he couldn't quite define. The guy who slid over looked kind of sleazy, which wasn't anything new at Danny's school. He wore a t-shirt with some name on it that sounded vaguely bandish, and his hair was slicked back with an obscene amount of gel.
"Hey baby, how you doing?"
Lise shifted in her seat uncomfortably. "Fine."
Time seemed to slow down as Danny watched with open mouthed horror at the scene unfolding before him.
"Yo, I was sitting here, right, I was sitting here and I was thinking. I was thinking, who could I show a good time. Then I saw you, and I was like Daaaaang, I'll show Lise a good time!"
The kid looked inordinately proud of himself, especially when Lise became obviously flustered and uncomfortable. Taking this as a sign from heaven that he should proceed, he slid a little closer, than noticed Danny for the first time. It was almost surreal, because the kid looked directly at Danny, right into his eyes, and then with an almost audible *click*, dismissed him as nobody of importance.
"So, Friday then?"
"Wh-what?"
The kid looked a little impatient. "I SAID, Friday, baby. You come to my place, I'll show you a good time."
Elise shifted nervously, and then salvation came calling. "Yo, dude, get over here! Whatchyou doin', man? We gots to go!" The kid smirked a bit, patted her hand, then walked off.
Later that night, Danny paced. "I can't believe it! How much of a putz am I, that I couldn't even say anything!", he thought to himself. Emotions and recriminations churned and raged within him as he stalked the driveway in front of his house. It had felt almost like a tiny wall had been built inside his mouth, so he couldn't say anything, couldn't do anything, and now it was too late. "Some friend I am. Never asked about how she got hurt, couldn't protect her from the sleazebag, what is WRONG with me?" He lifted his foot back to kick his brother's basketball into oblivion, but then stopped in utter frustration as sudden guilt plagued him, making him even more furious at himself, until he raged and raged with nowhere to go, inside the cage of his own body. Finally, he leaned against the fence bordering his neighbor's yard and sank to the ground slowly, tears clouding his eyes.
A moment later, he felt someone above him, looking down. He quickly wiped his eyes and looked up mournfully, expecting his brother, or maybe his dad. The man before him was someone he had never seen in his life, and yet he looked strangely familiar, like an uncle he'd never seen. The man was tall, tall, with hair like graveyard soil and madly twinkling eyes, like a deranged Santa's elf. He gave the impression of being slightly hunched over, and thin as a stick, a scarecrow come horribly to life. His body lurched like one as well, as if the stick he had previously hung on was still there holding him up. One horrible, clawed hand reached down and grabbed his shoulder as Danny scooted away involuntarily, and a disconcertingly normal voice came out of the man's horribly wide grin.
"Danny, Danny, Danny. How are you, my boy?"
As if breaking a spell, the voice of the man turned him into something more human. The shadows around him broke, and his eyes lost some of their twinkling eeriness.
"Fine, I'm fine. I have to go, though. I have to go, umm…place."
The man let out a sort of half-laugh, half shriek that sent shivers down Danny's spine. "Not so fast, Danny me boy, eh? What can ole' crawface do for you, hmm? Tell you what, I knows exactly what I can be doing for you. I knows, Danny."
The man's tone sent a sharp scurry of both fear and hope through Danny's body, like carsickness in reverse. He knew, somehow, that the man could do something for him.
"I don't want to be afraid anymore, mister."